Purgatory Wonderland -Chapter One, Part One There had at one time existed a sun, just as there had once been sanity –the diminishing vestiges of which only exist purely in evanescent fairytales. The diurnal star took with it in its departure the concept of truth and reason, allowing reality to corrode away into the insanity lurking underneath in the cognitive depths of the mind. With no rhyme or reason, madness was able to bare its wicked fangs unchallenged. And so began the worldwide phenomenon that came to be called the mass Lunar Effect.
I think it's very good. I like it, I do. The characters, Narcissa and the old man (Jantus?), my first impression is that they're rather deep and thoroughly likeable, and I do wish to know more about them. As for the story itself, you've created an astoundingly imaginative world for yourself here, and you said that it's inspired by Alice in Wonderland? Well, it captures the same ruthless imaginative power that Alice had. Very well done, and your vocabulary is wonderful as well. Some negative feedback (because there always is xD) is that you might want to make the spacing between paragraphs abit larger, so it's easier to read. Hit 'Enter' twice. And there can be TOO much of a good thing, so you might want to ease off on the big words every once in a while. Other than those minor gripes, FANTASTICALLY DONE.